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   Will Dockery to All   
   Re: "February," by Ina D. Coolbrith (184   
   18 Feb 26 04:39:32   
   
   From: user3274@newsgrouper.org.invalid   
      
   georgedance04@yahoo-dot-ca.no-spam.invalid (George J. Dance) posted:   
      
   > NancyGene wrote:   
   >> George J. Dance wrote:   
   >>> NancyGene wrote:   
   >   
   >>>>> February   
   > >>>>> by Ina D. Coolbrith (born Josephine Donna Smith)   
   > >>>>>   
   > >>>>> Newly wedded, and happy quite,   
   > >>>>> Careless alike of wind and weather,   
   > >>>>> Two wee birds, from a merry flight,   
   > >>>>> Swing in the tree-top, sing together:   
   > >>>>> Love to them, in the wintry hour,   
   > >>>>> Summer and sunshine, bud and flower!   
   > >>>>> So, belovéd, when skies are sad,   
   > >>>>> Love can render their sombre golden;   
   > >>>>> Turn the winter to summer glad,   
   > >>>>> Make of the weary heart a holden   
   > >>>>> For the sunshine, and the flowers that bloom,   
   > >>>>> Even in February’s gloom.   
   > >>>>   
   > >>>> Note that this is not "Ida," of the Columbus postcard fame.   
   > >>>   
   > >>> We see that George Jealous Dunce stole this poem from us and posted it   
   as his own.  He is so covetous.   
   > >>   
   > >> Really? What we see is that HarryLiar's NastyGoon is getting to be as big   
   a liar   
   > >> as he is. It must be infectious.   
   > >>   
   > >> For the record:   
   > >> First, I found the poem in Coolbrith's 1891 book, Songs of the Golden   
   Gate.   
   > >> The poem on the blog is identical to the one in that book.   
   > >> Second, I put Coolbrith's name on it, not my "own".   
   > >> Third, I did not use the version NastyGoon posted;   
   > >> some of the lines are different. So let's ask:   
   > >>   
   > >> NastyGoon, where did you get that version of "February" that you posted?   
   > >   
   > > We got it from Ina Coolbrith.  However, we see on p. 670 of our copy of   
   "The Century Illustrated Monthly Magazine" (1883) that one of the words is   
   different in that first published version from what is printed in later   
   versions.  There, it is "shadow    
   golden" instead of "sombre" or in some cases "somber."   
   >   
   > BZZT! The poem in the Century Magazine is identical to the one in The Golden   
   Gate and on PPB.   
   >   
   > A thought of thee, and the day is glad   
   > As a rose in the dewy dawn unfolden;   
   > And away, away, on passionate wings,   
   > My heart like a bird at thy window sings!   
   >   
   > So again, I'll ask where your four lines came from?   
   >   
   > They're actually quite bad . What is "a holden"? A holder, just misspelled   
   for the rhyme?   
   >   
   > The lines are so bad that I'd suspect you wrote them yourself; but then   
   again, if you'd   
   > tried to rewrite that part of the poem you'd probably have come up with:   
   >   
   > Turn the winter to summer glad,   
   > Make of our yesterdays a holden   
   > Like read newspapers or flowers that bloom,   
   > That stack up in piles in a gloomy room.   
   >   
   > This is a response to the post seen at:   
   > http://www.jlaforums.com/viewtopic.php?p=701548819#701548819   
      
   As Kevin Fries pointed out tonight, NancyGene is  troll, after all.   
      
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