From: mdhangton@gmail.com   
      
   On Wednesday, May 28, 2014 6:56:06 AM UTC-4, mumble wrote:   
      
   >    
   > Your piece is "the cat's ass" isn't it, you've lost me in two sentences.    
   >    
   >   Start scrapping it from the beginning, paragraph at a time, and see if    
   >    
   > anything is left; anyone who starts a piece like this has already gone    
   >    
   > far wrong.     
      
   This isn't an opening; it's part of a scene in the early middle in a   
   manuscript of perhaps novella length.  Yes, it describes a kitten taking a   
   dump.   
      
   It is much more difficult to be interesting writing about goofy British   
   aristocrats who fight over a silver cow creamer worth $200, than say a secret   
   agent blowing away terrorists and whose bosses are all moles.  That is the   
   fundamental issue that I'm    
   thinking about.   
      
   I don't know you, although I've written to you in posts a few times.  May I   
   ask if you're a writer of some sort making a comment about technique, or are   
   you a fan from rasfw giving me a sort of review?   
      
   --- SoupGate-Win32 v1.05   
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