From: julie@pascal.org   
      
   On Saturday, August 23, 2014 5:14:47 PM UTC-6, Nicky wrote:   
   > On Saturday, August 23, 2014 5:33:52 PM UTC+1, Brian M. Scott wrote:   
   >    
   Thank you, thank you.  You guys are great.  I really appreciate that you took   
   the time to read through this and give such thoughtful feedback.    
   >    
   > > Interesting.  If I understand correctly, Eileen is initially    
   > > a human being, and the spell invoking a demon has in some    
   > > sense actually created one.   
   >     
   >    
   > That is an interesting thing I agree.   
   >    
      
   This is nearly exactly it.  I stopped before the end of the section because I   
   was trying to be very good about the 500 word limit.   
      
   I think that, in my mind, I've been treating the whole story as a dream   
   sequence which makes it distant because I'm subconsciously choosing language   
   that adds that indistinct element to events.  But it's not a dream, she   
   doesn't wake up and everything is    
   back to normal.  I really *hate* when that happens, so I refuse to do it.   
      
   But I do think that her brain doesn't every quite work right afterward.  Time   
   is odd... she's a bit ghost-like, though she's a dragon.  But I think it's   
   clear that distance isn't probably a good idea if I want to pull readers in,   
   even if it's logical.   
      
   -Julie   
      
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