From: nicky.matthews@btinternet.com   
      
   On Tuesday, September 16, 2014 11:25:29 PM UTC+1, Jymesion wrote:   
   > On Tue, 16 Sep 2014 02:41:43 -0700 (PDT), Nicky   
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   > >But it has to be implicit in your world building and the reader usually   
   needs to be able to join the dots of the society in order for it to make   
   sense. Everything has to be there underpinning the action.   
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   > In this instance, it's more character background than anything else   
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   > because the conflict isn't within the corporation. They find that   
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   > someone might have been doing something which should be impossible.   
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   > They have to find ways to confirm it and try to track down who and   
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   > why.   
      
   Then I think I'd probably ask what function it serves. Is it to increase the   
   stakes? Put them characters under pressure? Provide unresolved sexual tension?   
   It could be very useful but I still think that background detail has to be   
   live and active in the    
   story or its kind of dead and useless. Characters push against their   
   background circumstances or are shaped by it, so you kind of show it through   
   what they are opposing ie I still think that there would be more tension in   
   that scene you posted up thread    
   otherwise what is the point of those constraints? Do you see what I mean? ( It   
   is rather late here and I'm not sure I'm making sense)   
      
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