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   William Vetter to All   
   Re: Linguistic voice woes   
   18 Jul 15 22:44:00   
   
   From: mdhangton@gmail.com   
      
   Because I'm bored, I am going to let you all kick me around.   
      
   Below is a fragment from a 1900 word story I completed today.  50 years   
   in the future, soldiers in a jungle firebase are hanging around,   
   talking to a captured teenaged male Vietnamese insurgent.  The 1st   
   person POV is their lieutenant.  There is only one foreign phrase in   
   the manuscript, which you will notice below.   
      
   You can tell me how you react to the way I inserted it.  There is no   
   other reference to it, or translation of it present anywhere else in   
   the manuscript.   
      
      
         "What's your name?"   
         The journalist was talking to my prisoner now.  Crap.   
   "Don't speak to him," I said.   
         "That's what I came to Vietnam for -- the inside scoop."   
   He turned to back to the kid.  "Ko thane la zee?"   
         "You come here and speak our language," the kid accused,   
   "and your Vietnamese _sucks_."   
         I had to turn my face away not to laugh.   
         "He's right," Miller said.  "That's what you say to a   
   girl."   
      
   --- SoupGate-Win32 v1.05   
    * Origin: you cannot sedate... all the things you hate (1:229/2)   

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