From: jbeeson@invalid.net.invalid   
      
   On Wed, 29 Aug 2018 10:56:57 -0500, Capuchin    
   wrote:   
      
   [snip]   
      
   > "Enough!" the CEO said. He looked sternly at the woman, then at   
   > Benedict, before turning back to Jeremy. "I apologize. My colleagues   
   > do not enjoy working together. This can cause dissent and an   
   > occasional disregard for rules." After touching his tablet to make it   
   > go dark and pushing it away from him, he sat back and steepled his   
   > fingers, looking very much like a man having to do a disagreeable   
   > task. "You sensed a force which my associate manipulated. It was quite   
   > inappropriate for him to do so without your knowledge and consent. He   
   > will compensate you for the distress. It has, however, told us much of   
   > what we need to know."   
   >   
   > *****   
   >   
   > (Extra points if you spot the worst clunker in that paragraph which I   
   > dearly want to change but don't know how to without giving it an undue   
   > number of words!)   
      
   Well, I snagged on:   
      
   > After touching his tablet to make it   
   > go dark and pushing it away from him,   
      
   I'd try   
      
   > He switched off the screen of his tablet, pushed it away from him,   
   > and sat back and steepled his fingers.  He looked very much like a man   
   > having to do a disagreeable task.   
      
   I have yet to find any use for a computer that doesn't have a   
   keyboard, so what I've said he did to the tablet probably sounds   
   weird.  Also, I don't know how to make "it" point to "tablet" rather   
   than "screen".   
      
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