From: bobthrollop@gmail.com   
      
   On Friday, December 14, 2018 at 7:40:04 PM UTC-8, Brian Pickrell wrote:   
   > ...it   
   > occurred to me that I always use the same point-of-view and voice to   
   > write things like this and it really doesn't work.   
      
   The point of view I speak of is one that's in the third person, a person   
   noticing details of the place she is in, events as they happen, and few to no   
   thoughts of her own about any of it. (I've decided that for my purposes the   
   definition of point of view    
   means not only where or in whose head is the "camera" located, but how does   
   the chronology flow and what higher-level conclusions are involved.)  My lead   
   character E. is on a journey from A to B in a foreign countryside, and I   
   thought I'd set the scene    
   for the next action by describing the trip.  This sometimes works, but here   
   it's a boring travelogue.   
      
   Why did I put my character E. in such a scene if it's not interesting?  Well,   
   I'm asking myself that too.  Part of the reason is that I thought it was going   
   to be interesting.  Also, the general plot outline has her preparing for an   
   easy battle and then    
   finding that it's going to be much harder than she thought; here is where I   
   establish the easy part.   
      
   I'd like to summarize more and make these descriptions get to the point, but   
   it feels out of character every time I try to do so.  E's personality is a   
   tricky mix of passivity and action that I haven't mastered.  Right now she   
   should not be too observant.   
     More specifically, she's travelling with a character B. who's a story   
   instigator, and I need to work out why, with all this time on their hands, she   
   doesn't come out and ask him directly why he's involving her in his cockamamie   
   plans.  I currently    
   envision B. as a detached character whose goals must always remain cryptic,   
   something like Gandalf.   
      
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