From: A_Tina_Hall@kruemel.org
On 21.01.19, Capuchin wrote:
> On 20 Jan 2019 "A. Tina Hall" wrote:
>> On 20.01.19, Capuchin wrote:
>>> If a camera is within the field, is it accurately recording a
>>> distorted reality or is it recording its distorted perception of
>>> reality?
>>
>> That's what I wonder, or suggest you could have your scientists
>> wonder.
> I have this intense feeling that the more I explain, the deeper the
> hole I'm digging.
I'm also getting the impression that we digress from the initial thing
someone reading your story might wonder: what about cameras. :)
When you get round to explaining what the scientists know, you could
mention whatever they observed when they tried. Whether that's camera
explodes, or film blank (or memory card melted), or something more
useful, depends on what you want for the story. :)
> I see the need to keep up the "we're early researchers and don't have
> any solid answers yet" vibe. I suspect that's going to be a main
> turning point in the plot.
Sounds good.
> It's almost like they're at the "we built this Wimshurst machine and
> can make pretty sparks" level, and you're asking how they measure
> attenuation of radio waves in a non-ferrous inductor.
Hm, and here I thought putting up a camera would be an obvious thing to
try, if they have them. :)
>>>> What about possible injuries?
>>
>>> Not likely unless someone wants to use him as a test subject, and
>>> he's far too valuable to them for that.
>>
>> Like Joy said, he doesn't know that. :)
> You may want to read my response to her.
I did. You're explaining what she or I should see in the story, but I'm
not asking you to explain this. I'm suggesting you put something into
the actual story text. What you do with the suggestion is up to you. :)
Talking here won't change the story text or what someone like I would
wonder when reading it.
>> I'm thinking about having the possibility/exclusion of it covered in
>> the job offer and contract, not asking you as writer about it. :)
> A lot of that, from my point of view, is covered by the fact they
> have lawyers to set everything up.
Then a thought in that regard might do. :)
> Since it's not mentioned in the story, he must not have noticed any
> particular emphasis in the contract on the risks he faces.
A reader might wonder, though, is all I'm saying. :)
>> Was just an offer though. I'd certainly like a betareader. :)
> I would offer, but I'm a terrible betareader because if I get caught
> up in the characters, I miss all sorts of plot holes, bad pacing,
> etc. because I lose sight of how the story is being told, and if I
> don't get swept away, all I see are poofreading errors and don't
> notice the pygmy mentalist in chapter two is a flat-footed Martian
> cop by chapter nine.
LOL. :)
Well, if you're ever bored and curious, just learning whether you'd be
swept away or bored out of your mind could help. Mind, reading 200k word
books (3 of them, when I finish the third one one day) might be a bit
much for just that.
Would be nice to have someone to talk with about it too, maybe get
direct suggestions or inspiration on what to do in the third book.
Right now I'm reading through the books again and hope I'll get and keep
some momentum to pour some text into the third one. :)
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