XPost: alt.arts.poetry.comments, alt.poetry   
   From: ironywaves@knology.net   
      
   "Renay"  wrote in message   
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   > "Will Dockery"  wrote in message   
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   > >> Sorry, I dropped to my knees, literally, laffing, at this CatShit   
   > > below.   
   > >>   
   >   
   > nice job leaving the dates out again, Drunkery!   
      
   I can leave the dates if you want, Renny Skank James.   
      
   > okay, class, let's begin. below is a "poem"   
   > obviously, if it was worth saving I'd have   
   > rewritten it once I got a better handle and   
   > some education on what poetry is. (NOTE:   
   > it's not about heart, soul, etc.) so together let's   
   > see what we can salvage. if not, let's simply   
   > figure out where it all went so terribly wrong.   
      
   You posted the crap, you must have thought it was good, huh?   
      
   > (this exercise is not for Drunkery. first of all,   
   > he's not bright enough to get anything out of   
   > it.   
      
   More to the point, the poems are too shitty for me to get anything out of   
   them, other than a laugh.   
      
   > >>  it don't hurt   
   > >>   
   > >>  she ain't hurt, that's what my grandpa said   
   > >>  after I fell off the tractor   
   > >>  she ain't hurt - and I wasn't   
   > >>  grandma made me come in the house anyway   
   >   
   > first of all, there are too many words up there.   
   > it interferes w/any possible rhythm. every extra   
   > syllable has to go.   
      
   The best idea would be to delete the piece of crap from the archives, Renny.   
      
   ---   
   "I believe that I am in hell, therefore I am there."   
   Arthur Rimbaud   
      
   Zorro's Medicine Show [Will Dockery]:   
   http://www.ypsiarbor.com/soho.htm   
      
   Shadowville poet Jocelyn's "Note For Zorro":   
   http://www.lulu.com/items/108000/108279/1/preview/44-Roman.mpg   
      
   --- SoupGate-Win32 v1.05   
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