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   On Thu, 24 Feb 2005 20:54:38 -0500, "Araik Margarian"   
    wrote:   
      
   >A Story   
   >(Poetic Documentary)   
   >   
   >Let me try to write in English   
   >The language mighty and complex   
   >The language that does not believe in tears   
   >And is reach and precise as math   
   >However my pen is weak to express myself.   
      
   Change 'reach' to 'rich'.   
      
   >So I am Araik Margarian   
   >A failed immigrant from Armenia   
   >Failed in marriage in work in friendships -   
   >Who's fault? Who cares. Failed and that's it.   
      
   Add comma after 'marriage' and 'work'.  Add question mark after 'Who   
   cares'.   
      
   >Many tricky treats and sneaky snakes   
   >Surround you in this great country   
   >Some of them I bypassed with dignity   
   >Some of them I tried to compromise with   
   >But found compromised myself.   
      
   Change 'Surround you' to 'Surround me'.  Put a comma after 'with'.   
      
   >Found fabrications all around myself   
   >In virtual plantations   
   >Plantators were planting evidence   
   >And cash out its fruits.   
   >If it were a Sci-Fi it could be wonderful reading   
   >And amusing entertainment.   
   >But this is real life   
   >And I am the loser   
   >But this is a mess   
   >When messor is hidden   
   >And I am targeted   
   >Senseless and unfair.   
      
   I understand what you're saying about planting evidence, but you'll need   
   better words than 'plantators' and 'plantations'.   
   The word 'plantations' especially relates to the history of slavery in   
   this country, and I know that's not what you're talking about.   
      
   Also, I don't think there is any such word as 'messor', so you may need   
   a substitute for that as well.   
      
   >I thought I had bright personality   
   >But it appears I've been laughed at   
   >for my naivety.   
   >.   
   >   
   >And who will believe that I am I   
   >When sophisticated network of plantators   
   >Portrays me otherwise?   
      
   As long as you and God know who you are, that should be all that   
   matters.   
      
   >I still trust the world   
   >And didn't lose my faith.   
   >And believe the goodness   
   >Prevails at the end.   
      
   That, I think, is what life is all about -- goodness prevailing against   
   the darkness.   
      
   >I'd laugh myself on this story   
   >If only I were not portrayed as antihero   
   >But I don't complain   
   >I don't want to complain   
      
   Don't forget to end each sentence with a period.   
      
   >Just let me continue   
   >What God granted me.   
   >Only don't dare to talk   
   >On the name of God.   
   >God is great, God is really great,   
   >He would not create   
   >This conscienceless mess.   
   >Just tell me, show me my real errors   
   >For what I deserve this Chaos.   
   >Don't make up, please, don't make up reality-   
   >What is then the sense of God and morality?   
   >   
   >Araik Margarian.   
   >09-03-2003.   
      
   You asked some very good questions back in 2003.  Wiser men have asked   
   the same questions many, many times.  As yet, there are no answers to be   
   found.   
      
   Henrietta   
      
   --- SoupGate-Win32 v1.05   
    * Origin: you cannot sedate... all the things you hate (1:229/2)