XPost: alt.arts.poetry.comments, alt.poetry   
   From: renayspam@yahoo.com   
      
   "Karla"  wrote in message   
   news:it7c211fnt89oerhkmjn1uembo948ia9ii@4ax.com...   
   > On 2 Mar 2005 11:41:45 -0800, "Will Dockery"    
   > wrote:   
   >   
   >>   
   >>Jane Asher's Vagina wrote:   
   >>> On 2 Mar 2005 09:07:09 -0800, Will Dockery wrote:   
   >>>   
   >>> > Jane Asher's Vagina wrote:   
   >>> >> On Wed, 02 Mar 2005 06:20:40 GMT, Karla wrote:   
   >>> >>   
   >>> >>> Caring for Others   
   >>> >>>   
   >>> >>> Vestibule smelling of old potpourri,   
   >>> >>> coat hooks above a mash of rubber,   
   >>> >>> and in one corner, a tumbled umbrella.   
   >>> >>> Flocked wallpaper, deep blue,   
   >>> >>> electric candle sconces along the walls,   
   >>> >>> shadow couch and shadow pillows.  The nameless   
   >>> >>   
   >>> >> Nameless? Let me help. Pure CatShit.   
   >>> >   
   >>> > Karla's poem, while it had some interesting and sometimes   
   >>disturbing   
   >>> > moments, is basically a convoluted mess.   
   >>> >   
   >>> > She desperately need to focus, and *edit*.   
   >>> >   
   >>> > As it is, *catshit* works as a one word critique: bad, over-written   
   >>> > "poetry".   
   >>>   
   >>> She has, again, marred the wart known as the Cabal. Slurpette   
   >>Obnoxious,   
   >>> rip a stripe of your sleeve.   
   >>   
   >>Heh. Kabol's lack of commentary on this very flawed poem noted.   
   >   
   > I didn't post this to alt.arts.poetry.comments OR alt.poetry.  Why did you   
   > publish this to other groups?   
   >   
   > Also, it's hard to respond to your comments.  You sit on the fence.  In   
   > your   
   > opinion, there are "interesting and sometimes disturbing moments" -   
   > comments   
   > which refer to the narrative only.  Later, you tag onto Jane Asher's   
   > Vagina's   
   > (a usenet handle which remains unchallenged by you; who's in a clique?)   
   > comments and stamp this draft catshit.  I don't know about you, but I   
   > scoop   
   > and dump my catshit.  Help me out here!  I'm the dumb one, remember?  Do I   
   > dump the whole lot or do I redeem the "interesting and sometimes   
   > disturbing   
   > moments"?  And if I keep those, what are they?  Help!  I "desperately need   
   > to   
   > focus, and *edit*".   
   >   
   > Karla   
      
   Ms. K,   
      
   while others will appreciate you trying to cut Drunkery   
   some slack and actually give him the opportunity for intelligent   
   exchange, I can tell you from experience that it is pointless.   
   it's been done before and the result is the same. he squirms   
   around and never quite makes an actual point. however, if   
   someone else makes an actual point, he might just support   
   it. until the next actual point is made, in which case he might   
   support it, instead.   
      
   since only part of the poem is up there, I'll only give part of   
   a comment. ;) "vestibule smelling: and "tumbled umbrella"   
   feel great in my mouth!   
      
   Renay   
      
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