XPost: alt.arts.poetry.comments, alt.poetry
From: ironywaves@knology.net
"Michael Cook" wrote in message
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>
> "Peter J Ross" wrote in message
> news:slrnd2cj3j.43r.gadfly@nntp.petitmorte.net...
> > On Wednesday 02 March, Karla wrote in rec.arts.poems:
> >
> >> On 2 Mar 2005 11:41:45 -0800, "Will Dockery"
> >> wrote:
> >
> >>>Jane Asher's Vagina wrote:
> >>>> On 2 Mar 2005 09:07:09 -0800, Will Dockery wrote:
> >>>>
> >>>> > Jane Asher's Vagina wrote:
> >>>> >> On Wed, 02 Mar 2005 06:20:40 GMT, Karla wrote:
> >>>> >>
> >>>> >>> Caring for Others
> >>>> >>>
> >>>> >>> Vestibule smelling of old potpourri,
> >>>> >>> coat hooks above a mash of rubber,
> >>>> >>> and in one corner, a tumbled umbrella.
> >>>> >>> Flocked wallpaper, deep blue,
> >>>> >>> electric candle sconces along the walls,
> >>>> >>> shadow couch and shadow pillows. The nameless
> >>>> >>
> >>>> >> Nameless? Let me help. Pure CatShit.
> >>>> >
> >>>> > Karla's poem, while it had some interesting and sometimes
> >>>disturbing
> >>>> > moments, is basically a convoluted mess.
> >>>> >
> >>>> > She desperately need to focus, and *edit*.
> >>>> >
> >>>> > As it is, *catshit* works as a one word critique: bad, over-written
> >>>> > "poetry".
> >>>>
> >>>> She has, again, marred the wart known as the Cabal. Slurpette
> >>>Obnoxious,
> >>>> rip a stripe of your sleeve.
*snip*
> > I'll be posting a LIST of people who agree with this critique of the
> > leisurely beginning of your draft as soon as they've received the usual
> > bribes. (Jim, I've temporarily run out of 18-yo virgins. Will a
> > natural blonde 20-yo do, just this once?)
> >
> > PJR :-)
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> i agree
Me too, more or less.
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