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   >> firefly?   
   >>   
   >> Pick ONE metaphor and stick with it.   
   >>   
   >>>>>>>  like gravestones   
   >>>>>>>  never noticed   
   >>>>>>>  never seen.   
   >>   
   >> OMFG!   
   >>   
   >> Now the dimming, streaking, hitchhiking, hastily departing firefly like   
   >> light has turned into unseen gravestones???   
   >>   
   >> I can't wait to discover what the morph into next.   
   >>   
   >>>>>>>  Like marbles   
   >>>>>>>  spilling from shattered minds.   
   >>   
   >> There it is!   
   >>   
   >> They went from dimming, to streaking, to hitchhiking, to hastily   
   >> departing fireflies, to unseen gravestone, to marbles spilling from   
   >> shattered minds.   
   >>   
   >> And this is the end of the poem?   
   >>   
   >> What was the topic?  The speaker lying in the "Here" or "There"?  The   
   >> unknown person he was addressing?  Someone's life having passed -- or   
   >> passed by?  Contemplating returning to... something?  Or the bizarre   
   >> transformation of the morning light?   
   >   
   > Interesting points to consider   
      
   I didn't mean to abruptly cut that off, my dog is barking to go outside   
   for a walk.   
      
   Bella back soon   
      
   --- SoupGate-DOS v1.05   
    * Origin: you cannot sedate... all the things you hate (1:229/2)